The point we had to improve as the amount of the sentence in the paragraph was not enough, we had to put more information in each paragraph. The sentence in the paragraph was not enough in almost every paragraph so I thought our essay had not enough information that the reader can assent.
Also, there were many pronouns. It was there in almost only in my paragraph, so I will change all of it to the word that does not include pronouns. I want to have more variations to replace all of these pronouns to other words.
Almost all of the mistakes was the point that is easy to change. It was better to read a few times before submitting to find these mistakes. After that, I want to know a more high-level way to write the essay.
Also, there were many pronouns. It was there in almost only in my paragraph, so I will change all of it to the word that does not include pronouns. I want to have more variations to replace all of these pronouns to other words.
Almost all of the mistakes was the point that is easy to change. It was better to read a few times before submitting to find these mistakes. After that, I want to know a more high-level way to write the essay.
